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i can't explain
how you sat there counting dollars
while your house burned down around you
didn't you hear the children scream?
or did it just mean nothing to you

if i opened my eyes
(after sleeping)
would the walls be restored
and my sanity encased back in its box
no, it can't
it melted in the fire
i knew the plastic wasn't good enough

i could have sworn i saw your fingers
twitch, your wrist flick
as the match caught alight, reflecting your face in the slick quick slippery
gasoline trails

and then you sat
and i stared
my boxes melted

i want my styrofoam walls back again
they were warmer

i want the wool on my eyes again
it was warmer

i wanted to burn with you
in there
it looked warmer
©2006-2009 ~Frankly-Warped
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hmm.. not sure.. is preeeetty crappy like always but *shrug*
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I really like the last stanza.

interesting concept. I like it.

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lover, now that you've left me,
I'm glad you're unlovely.
Burn in hell, burn in heaven.
hehe

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"You are not a beautiful or unique snowflake." - Tyler Durden, Fight Club
thanks muchly

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"You are not a beautiful or unique snowflake." - Tyler Durden, Fight Club
I can relate to that

had I written it I would have felt compelled to write more...probably not a good thing. I say too much

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-------Jadis///...
:shamrock: "with God all things are possible" :shamrock:
heh.. it's not one of my best, rhythm and structure wise, but people seem to like it.. i tend to be concise in poetry, but not in anything else :p

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"You are not a beautiful or unique snowflake." - Tyler Durden, Fight Club
lol concise in poetry and not anything else....ooooooo i can soooooo relate to that.

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-------Jadis///...
:shamrock: "with God all things are possible" :shamrock:

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